JASPER

[dramatispersonae]

You're in a small grove of trees off the side of the road. Somehow, their thick leaves muffle all sound from beyond, leaving only faint whispers and echoes at the fringe of your hearing.

Comments

Re: DISCUSSION

[starebear]

[jiii]

Re: DISCUSSION

[mirroredvalue]

[...Is that a jii at me for being offended, or at the letter itself?]

Re: DISCUSSION

[starebear]

[the letter.]

[make someone bleed... that is not a good game]

Re: DISCUSSION

[mirroredvalue]

It isn't, but if it's just limiting itself to being annoyingly preachy and bleeding all over our letters, it's not dangerous, at least.

Re: DISCUSSION

[mirroredvalue]

Okay, got something:

"You and your friends do make perhaps the best game. Perhaps someone can bleed at same time. You?"

Not the best, but... It at least make it seem like maybe someone's bleeding instead of "make someone bleed".

Re: DISCUSSION

[starebear]

[...nods, a little put out but agreeable]

Re: DISCUSSION

[mirroredvalue]

...Maybe we should change the words a bit. What would be good to replace bleed with. Breathe? People like breathing.

Perhaps someone can breathe at same time! You!

Re: DISCUSSION

[starebear]

[...nods!!]

[better.]